You learned in high school that the difference between metaphor and simile is that simile uses like or as. (Of course, it also uses than.) True enough, but that’s like saying that measles are spots on your body. They are, but if you look deeper, the spots are there because a virus is present. There is something more fundamental going on.
Samuel Taylor Coleridge called metaphor “an act of the imagination,” whereas he relegated simile to “an act of fancy.” He identified the difference between metaphor and simile as a difference of degree, depending on how much the two ideas shared in common. If they shared only a few, simile. More, metaphor.
For Coleridge, this would be a candidate for simile:
Like a lobster boil’d, the morn
From black to red began to turn
A boiled lobster doesn’t have much in common with morning except that they both change from black to red: the morning sunrise reddens the sky, the boiled lobster turns from black to red as it cooks. Metaphor wouldn’t work here:
Morning is a boiled lobster
The boiled lobster of the morning
Morning’s boiled lobster
Perhaps the number of qualities the two ideas share is a good guideline for choosing between metaphor and simile, but I prefer making the choice in terms of commitment to the ideas. Say this aloud several times:
Love is a rose.
Where did you focus?
Right. On the second term:
Love = rose
Rose absorbs love. You see love through the image of roses. So if you want the texture, smell, color of the rose in focus, use metaphor.
Love is a rose
But if you want love as the focus, use simile. Say this several times aloud:
Love is like a rose
Now where did you focus?
Right. Your attention stays on love. You see rose as an example of love.
While the “is” of metaphor allows the free passage of energy to the second term, simile blocks the energy transfer and keeps your focus on love. Like is an energy blocker – it resolutely commits to focus on the first term. Look:
Freedom is riding a bike for the first time without help.
The energy it transferred to the bike rider here. Bike rider absorbs freedom. You see her wobbling away down the sidewalk, a breathless parent smiling and gasping as he watches her pull further away – a harbinger of things to come. But,
Freedom is like riding a bike for the first time without help.
Here you stay committed to the concept of freedom. Maybe you reflect a bit on the feeling you had when first riding your bike alone, but muttering the conclusion, “Yup, that’s what freedom is like.”
Metaphor commits to the second term; simile commits to the first term. Like this from Leonard Cohen:
Like a bird on the wire
Like a drunk in a midnight choir
I have tried in my way to be free
The bird and the drunk are simply examples of things trying to be free. As a metaphor it would be, at best, confusing:
I’m a bird on the wire
I’m a drunk in a midnight choir
Trying in my way to be free
The question pops up immediately: which one are you? How can you be both?
Like a baby, stillborn
Like a beast with his horn
I have torn everyone who reached out for me
crashes and burns as
I’m a baby, stillborn
I’m a beast with his horn
I have torn everyone who reached out for me
It depends on where you want your focus to be, on the first term or the second. It’ll make a huge difference on what you do next – how you develop your section.
Time is a river asks you to elaborate on the river, so you write about river, not about time:
Time is just a river, and its banks are lined with trees
And some have ropes to swing from
When you feel the summer’s heat
There’s a thrill in kicking outward
To the water down below
And you feel the cool surround you
Feel the current taking hold,
Both free and almost free
Floating down the river, through the shadows of the trees
Time is like a river asks you to commit to time, not to river.
Time is like a river, flowing through the years
It moves you on your journey
Through laughter, through the tears…
In metaphor, the second term is the boss. In simile, the first term sits in the comfy chair. Big difference.
…we gaze out over the timbered ridges … down to the black triangle of the bottom dam lying deep and close in the view like a heavy brooch dropped into a
loosely spread handkerchief.
Helen Garner, Three Acres, More or Less
Wow! How do you do that? Is finding metaphor and simile a talent you either have or don’t?
Nope. You can practice it. The second 14-day challenge of my Songwriting Without Boundaries is a good place to start. Here’s a snippet:
Exercise: Find a simile for each of the following terms. Then, write a short elaboration on each one. I’ve added examples from writers who submitted to each challenge in the book. Trust is like ______________
A good night’s sleep. It allows your mind to rest, and you can rely on it. (Charlie Worsham)
Your turn: Divorce is like ____________
War: Lines are drawn, territories won and lost, and usually there is a significant amount of post-traumatic stress. (Charlie Worsham)
Give these challenges a shot. Each day metaphor and simile will sink deeper into your bloodstream, a 14-day energy drink that’ll accelerate your writing like a dose of rocket fuel injected into the tank of a ‘62 Volkswagen microbus. Just like that. I promise.
Pat Pattison is a professor at Berklee College of Music, where he teaches lyric writing and poetry.